An oblique verse

>> Wednesday, October 14, 2009

There were days this year that were nonsensical
listless hours that had nothing to do with you, though
in a strange way had everything to do with you;
days of cerulean tobacco fog and tea,
gossip and light talk, cocktail and bitter men,
gorges of crème caramel under tapered candlesticks
nights I’d clutch a pen and decanter
stirring random ounces of scotch with words
telling myself I’d review my efforts later
for the evidence of each potion on my poetry,
knowing damn well that the quintessential pith of
the exercise was an excuse to get rotten drunk
I began with an account of our longest kiss,
two mugs later squeaking aloud, writing
in a surly scrawl interspersed
on blots of alcohol dripping from gelid lips
suddenly I fancied myself in the pitcher
an addled figure galloping beside cubes and cups
cajoling, conjuring, imploring all that drifted
to carry me along to the future
that would make everything all right,
the future was immense, wise and rosy,
final abide of all who were drifting
so I’d said to myself, skim, skim to be a part of…
the first thing I remember about future is
how cold it was, faces hit by hurricane of letters
past settled on crevices like mounds of debris
the shelves of hereafter obscured by history,
stray moments bleeding onto the hearth,
I wished you were happy; with whatever or whoever
it wasn’t love described in poems, some rapture
wafting into the realms of bliss
was it leading us somewhere I could not go?
I hope you weren’t imagining a future with me
for I had no true vision of that future,
or whether I’d live long enough to have one.

32 comments:

Perry Strange October 14, 2009 at 5:49 PM  

hey--you've got your "you" back!

... think you've gotten that "intoxicated"-feeling down pat. And the oblique-ness... that's good. Feel like the poem's all cross-angles. Complex in a really appealing way.

I like it. I'm going to read it again.

aria October 14, 2009 at 9:04 PM  

Hehe @ 'you' back!
Most you(s) are fictional.. still waiting for that real 'you' who would make me write a straight verse :(
Thanks so much for liking this. I thought of trying the formatting you suggested but I'm so very verbose.. so maybe next time.

Rakesh Vanamali October 14, 2009 at 10:12 PM  

Reminds me of my hay days, that were careless, blissful, bold and happy!!!!

Gal, U do some serious poetry!!

aria October 14, 2009 at 10:21 PM  

Thanks Rakesh! Its so much fun living without ‘a future’ or at least.. not caring a fig about it. I too miss my ‘younger days’ :(

aliceinneverland October 14, 2009 at 10:43 PM  

why cant i comment on ur other blog? remove that 'only blogspot people can comment' thingie...

this is one is like a heady mix of vodka and whiskey... whoa...! i loved it... will hop here often...love this space...

aria October 15, 2009 at 2:00 AM  

Hii Alice! welcome to my blog :) so very glad to see you here. Sorry for that inconvenience of not being able to comment. I’ve removed that setting.
Actually I do not even like moderating but there is a creep who mostly haunts that other blog and leaves filthy comments which is why I had made it so cloistered.

Chaggoholic.... October 15, 2009 at 2:07 AM  

Well well i like the past reflection a slight bit of optimism on the next course but then keepin it to a bit and not lookin desperate for it....

aria October 15, 2009 at 2:29 AM  

Chaggs .. thanks a lot. I like that analysis very much, makes a nice oblique pattern :D
waiting for your new post. take care.

Old Monk October 15, 2009 at 4:18 AM  

Going through your poem I was traveling through Park street, low lit bars,Sona Gachi in Kolkata and so many dingy places the world over.Wow man!

d gypsy! October 15, 2009 at 6:20 AM  

love the first few lines...

rest-I couldn't relate to much

tc

btw happy deepavali, have a green one!

Quackster October 15, 2009 at 9:28 PM  

Indeed experimental and to one side. Nevertheless, it is poetic and creative.

wildflower October 16, 2009 at 1:52 AM  

sigh!
i guess i'm both..
breathless&speechless

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:21 AM  

Old Monk.. that was a lovely comment, thanks a lot.. have read so much about Sona Gachi that can almost imagine though haven't really seen it for real.. do drop by again :)

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:24 AM  

Neha.. Nice to see you back on blogs. Thanks for the wishes. Wishing you and your family a very Happy Diwali.. ideally I should've wished on your blog but it didn't strike me then.. me the tubelite :)

sanely insane October 16, 2009 at 3:25 AM  

meri dictionary kahaan hai...koi meri dictionary la do :P

i liked your poetry...its simple in its complexity :P

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:25 AM  

Quackster... thank you, glad you like.. yes it was very much experimental.. or perhaps just a poetic ramble.. I always suspect that my poetry isn't exactly a conventional poem.

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:27 AM  

Wildflower.. welcome to my blog. I am so happy you dropped by.. I remember reading your post through the link Neha provided on her blog.. it was a lovely piece. :)

shabbir October 16, 2009 at 3:27 AM  

Hmm got the essence of this..............

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:30 AM  

Sanely Insane..Gosh.. sometimes I keep blabbering... on my posts and comments both.. if you know what I mean... :) nice to have you back.. thanks for dropping by.

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:34 AM  

Shabbir.. welcome to my blog.. and also at the right time when I answering everyone as if I am writing a thesis.. glad you got the essence :D

sanely insane October 16, 2009 at 3:35 AM  

if u had a followers section somewhere it wud have been easier to link to ure blogs

aria October 16, 2009 at 3:40 AM  

Ohh I have zero followers so never considered having that section .. but that was sweet of you .. I'll think of adding it.

AshenGlow October 16, 2009 at 6:07 AM  

You know what this reminds me of? That song in DevD.. O Pardesi...

Straightforward, funky, haunting, and intoxicating at the same time...

Seems like you've found yourself.. hmm? :)

Love,
Ashen

aria October 16, 2009 at 12:26 PM  

Ashen .. I haven’t heard that song :( but will look for it. .infact I haven’t even watched that movie.. I just am in good mood these days .. no reason as such .. heh .. just generally .. though finding myself would take some time :D thanks so much for dropping by. Take care and have a wonderful Diwali.. must be first with NSG .. !!

Arthur Quiller Couch October 18, 2009 at 7:23 AM  

We seem to have similar issues.
But when you write, don't you think less could be more?

man in painting October 20, 2009 at 9:25 PM  

i was imagining your brain when you wrote it.i was looking up and saw those strange lights..felt like travelling through the strets of an unknown city.to be more precise..like running through the streets of a crowded city at midnight.i was gasping.felt insecure yet excited..
it was sheer pleasure.
thanks for the ride

AshenGlow October 21, 2009 at 1:45 AM  

Yes.. First one with NSG.. Took pledges to live with each other on the very previous Diwali and poof.. one year's gone just like that.. We are arranging Nobel prizes for each other.. Deserve it you see ;)

Belated greetings to you too.. Be happy re.. we all love it when you are...

Love,
Ashen

ani_aset October 21, 2009 at 4:50 AM  

I loved this one..infact you take me on a nice ride where i can feel every bit of emotion when you write..superb work :)

Scribbler October 22, 2009 at 1:52 AM  

words that cast a spell
expressions that leave you speechless

A smooth flow and a dizzy aftertaste

good one


keep it rollin;)

aria October 23, 2009 at 4:48 AM  

Arthur.. welcome back to blogs, its been really long.. and to answer your question.. well.. no :) (which is why, I write more!)

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MIP.. thanks a heap.. hoping to read something new on your space soon..

aria October 23, 2009 at 4:51 AM  

Ashen.. I didn’t celebrate this year .. had decided I wouldn’t celebrate any festival/birthday this year .. lost someone very close in the very beginning of the year so just didn’t feel like... Great to know you enjoyed your time. Thanks for the wishes.. and warm hugs :)

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Ani_aset.. Thanks for all your comments. Do drop by again.

aria October 23, 2009 at 4:52 AM  

Scribbler.. Welcome to Terminal Moraine. Thank you for your kind comment. :) Hope to see you again.

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