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>> Monday, August 4, 2008

the wind that parted clouds
has opened the sky
melting in the sunlight
at this moment, all is change
transformation seems permanent

a promise of bridging dead chasm
between body and mind
then sundering the soul
eternal gain and irretrievable loss
to be parceled out equally

with simultaneous depression
and exaltation, languidly
for a moment or two
I've lost my ability to imagine
you reading these words

poetry therefore has briefly
come undone or has regressed
to a moan, and you turn into
half-forgotten incantatory chant
invoked to ward off my loneliness

20 comments:

Vinay August 4, 2008 at 4:38 AM  

loved it...esp. the 2nd verse aria...
beauti-ful..!! :)

asuph August 4, 2008 at 9:56 AM  

how do you do it? coming up with one gem after another? sometimes i feel you're wasting yourself on us. really. please do think about publishing.

regards,
asuph

Perry Strange August 4, 2008 at 5:23 PM  
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Perry Strange August 4, 2008 at 5:33 PM  

oops. I just posted a single elipsis-- therefore have deleted it... my turn to slip up...

... I like this one because it's so tight-- really throws itself into high relief.

The. Last. Three. Lines.

Oh... my goodness-- yes!

aria August 4, 2008 at 10:32 PM  

Vinay .. thank you for your comment, glad you liked :)

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Asuph.. ohh you've made my day. :) thanks a heap. I guess monsoon is doing some wonders. I'm not sure about the quality but the quantity has suddenly increased and I am enjoying for the moment.

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Perry.. Hehe and I usually falter on your page. guess its infectious... yeah I am usually quite verbose.. :D thank you for your kind comment.

parikrama August 5, 2008 at 12:10 AM  

Mann mein rakkhu toh mora mann jaley..
Kahu toh, mukhh jaley..

Either ways, meri toh bolti bandh hein aaj kal. Tumhare jaise shaayar logo ka toh theek hein, 2 chaar liney likkh di.. aur mann halkaa kar liyaa. Hum jaise non-shayar log sirf chuppi saadey baithey rehte hein (aur baithey baithey jalte hein)

MAN IN PAINTING August 5, 2008 at 1:57 AM  
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MAN IN PAINTING August 5, 2008 at 2:03 AM  

I strongly second asuph..
not because publishing and being recognised by the world is something important..but it is important that more minds should dtaste this nector..and it is important more and more people visit terminal moraine and say..
Oh my god!
Aria!
you are unbelievable..

Bliss!
thats what i felt..
MIP

aria August 5, 2008 at 3:53 AM  

IW.. this isnt fair.. we were supposed to be 'gussa' .. now if you write stuff like this.. how can I fake anger? I had been laughing insanely since I read your comment .. awwww .. ok .. tell me what should I do to have you back? ;) if I ever had you in the first place.. btw shukriya .. aapne mere blog par kuch toh kaha.. believe you me .. we are in the same boat .. @ jalna .. *sigh sigh*

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Man in Painting.. what else can I say .. except .. thank you. Now that some of you have expressed so much confidence in me.. I'd seriously think about it. I never thought I was worth getting published .. though I secretly long to see my name on a printed cover someday :)

parikrama August 5, 2008 at 4:45 AM  

>> I had been laughing insanely since I read your comment .

Yaar se gam keh kar toh khush ho..
Lekin tum ye kya jaano ?
Tum dil ka ronaa rotey ho..
Woh dil mein hassta hoga !


meine badi seriously mera haal-e-dil bayaan kiya tha, lekin tum ho ke berehami hassey jaa rahi ho. *shaking head dejectedly*

aria August 5, 2008 at 11:56 PM  

ooops.. ab meri hasi band hai.. seriously :D
mujhey koi gaana-waana ya sher yaad hi nahi aa raha :( aur waise bhi .. mere dil ka haal sunne ka aapke paas kabhi time hi nahi hota.. then what happens to me.. have you ever wondered ? *sulking*

parikrama August 6, 2008 at 1:16 AM  

>> then what happens to me.. have you ever wondered ?

Yes, I do know what happens (then). You angrily switch on PC and your fingers fly over the keyboard writing these beautiful lines ;-)

It's a thankless job, i tell you, being a writers muse :D

aria August 6, 2008 at 2:08 AM  

aise muse ka kya use(besides what you just mentioned) jo sirf rone-dhone waali poem likhwaaye ;) I want to write something different .. if you are getting the drift .. ahem ..

Influential Deepu August 6, 2008 at 2:34 AM  

last paragraph just caught my attention and refused to let it go ..
i read, re-read and re-read it !!
it makes perfect new sense every time

asuph August 6, 2008 at 5:18 AM  

iw getting the drift? even if a cyclone blows him away, he'll wonder if it was some hallucination!

peter August 6, 2008 at 11:19 AM  

well !!
cudnt agree more on the above comments ..ur poem rocks ...and beliv me it does !!

I do write poems but now i am afraid to put 'em on blogs as it ws copied a few times from orkut and from other places ....but reading other's creation is obvsly pleasing !!

MAN IN PAINTING August 6, 2008 at 9:40 PM  

aria..
i tried a "yo-yo"
another form..
flashes of a single image..
and mysteries...
MIP

aria August 7, 2008 at 12:13 AM  

Deepesh.. Thank you, for your comment on both posts, valued :)

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Asuph.. you are soooo right. We have been stuck on the same inane bit and despite all my lift he gets no drift..so probably now I should shift .. ok this will go on n on ... *sigh*

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Peter.. that reminds me I was copied too.. at least I know about that one.. there could be many I am not aware of .. ergo I've stopped caring but I do know what you mean. thank you for your lovely comment :)

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Man in Painting .. just checked it out.. :)

parikrama August 7, 2008 at 1:33 AM  

>> aise muse ka kya use(besides what you just mentioned) jo sirf rone-dhone waali poem likhwaaye


Inhee pattharon pe chal ke,
Tum aa sako toh aao..
Mere ghar ke raaste mein,
Koi kehkashaa nahi hein..

aria August 7, 2008 at 2:11 AM  

aa hi toh rahi thi .. par aap apne ghar ka address bhi nahi bataate ;) galti se kahin aur pahunch gayi toh fir aap mujhsey ladenge :P (I still hope you get the drift . though its like breaking head on a wall)

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