ingeminating

>> Sunday, July 20, 2008

earmarked for death in this grotesque pandemonium
inept at descrying my way back to the surface
only light which exists here, is that of memory flaring up,
illuminating rough pictures and writings overhead
which you'd painted once, to invoke and placate me


I abide, gazing in wonder
turning first into warmth and recognition
then growing violent or somber, I stumble
scrambling my way along another shaft in this warren
until I see in its glow a mingling of shadow and light
it moves and dances


a miasma, gray and noxious
spreading into every corner of my consciousness
you are wordless, unnamed
when depleted, return
I would step out of these shadows
where in silence I labor my days away
and stand revealed


on sacrificial altar of memories, we’d lay together
fading as if we’d melt with the mist of the forgotten
reviving again with an intensity
my life like these words carry no meaning
whether I live or die, I’d remain
the emblem of your sins……

14 comments:

Sutta July 20, 2008 at 10:36 AM  

Profound.
Impressive.

Nash July 20, 2008 at 8:55 PM  

Great one. I couldn't quote anything. Loved everything. Keep writing.

PS Jokes are one their way. Let me know if you liked them. :-)

aria July 21, 2008 at 2:29 AM  

Sutta.. Thank you. Nice to see you again.

Nash.. Thanks for appreciating and also for 'jokes'

Alok July 21, 2008 at 6:04 AM  

whoa Aria, good stuff .. actually sublime stuff ... enjoyed it immensely.

As Nash pointed out it is difficult to pick a fav and I hold that view too but if I have to pick one, I would pick the last stanza and the way you ended it


Alok

MAN IN PAINTING July 21, 2008 at 7:56 AM  

Aria,
When i read you ,my whole self will shrink like a single cellular entity..all i could hear is my heart beats..
your words will come to me and take my breath away..
i am not exaggerating..
when i read the following lines..
"on sacrificial altar of memories, we’d lay together
fading as if we’d melt with the mist of the forgotten
reviving again with an intensity
my life like these words carry no meaning
whether I live or die, I’d remain
the emblem of your sins……
"the emblem of your sins"
what shall i tell you..
I cannot describe the happiness i got when i read the last stanza..
i forgot the theme, the mood, the shades...
i just see words and the images you have gifted us...
i just wonder
wonder!
thats what you gave us..
wishes..
take care..

aria July 21, 2008 at 11:04 PM  

Alok.. thank you. somebody else repeated what you'd said about the previous post.. perhaps I should've tried rewriting. someday when I am in a different mood.. I'll try sorting all this juk here rationally.. wonder if anything I've written is really good.. then maybe I'll think of rewriting a few.. lets see .. these days I'm literally pouring... seldom happens.

Man in Painting.. I am touched by your words.. honored.. really. being an artist perhaps you're able feel those hues.. coz there seldom is a theme behind what I write.. I'll cherish this comment. thank you.

d SINNER!!! July 21, 2008 at 11:47 PM  

"whether I live or die, I’d remain
the emblem of your sins……" can relate max to these lines...

like always this one was full of different shades and thoughts...sometimes I wonder how u write with all those thoughts, how u entwine them into one single process.....

impersonator July 22, 2008 at 7:36 AM  

profound images and intense like always.

aria July 22, 2008 at 10:45 PM  

Thank you Neha and Impersonator for dropping by and leaving your kind comments. Have a nice day ahead :)

Scribblers Inc July 23, 2008 at 6:54 AM  

I can imagine Enigma playing in the background...
impressed without a doubt...

Scribblers Inc.

goatman July 24, 2008 at 11:41 AM  

Your words do carry meaning; I just have to figure out what it is.
In meantime I will revel in the pictures and emotions your words evoke in me and consider myself lucky.

aria July 26, 2008 at 3:48 AM  

Thanks much, Scribblers and Goatman for dropping by and leaving your kind comments. Have a wonderful weekend.. :)

Casperbaba July 28, 2008 at 11:18 PM  

a miasma, gray and noxious
spreading into every corner of my consciousness
you are wordless, unnamed
when depleted, return
I would step out of these shadows
where in silence I labor my days away
and stand revealed

i read something about you here. would not tell it right now... but there's always a right time to let you know.

"whether I live or die, I’d remain
the emblem of your sins……"

emblem of the "sins"....? i beg to differ.

Casperbaba July 28, 2008 at 11:19 PM  

a miasma, gray and noxious
spreading into every corner of my consciousness
you are wordless, unnamed
when depleted, return
I would step out of these shadows
where in silence I labor my days away
and stand revealed

i read something about you here. would not tell it right now... but there's always a right time to let you know.

"whether I live or die, I’d remain
the emblem of your sins……"

emblem of the "sins"....? i beg to differ.

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