Counterfeit

>> Tuesday, June 24, 2008

Pain, its imitation, seems to be in nature of crown
a spire, a halo, here not simply to grace or embellish
but to express, to symbolize, only a measure of
how narrow and cloistered my life has become
a hackneyed conception of self and yet enthralling,
with whom I can share the failure of the moment
and in whose rejection, I annihilate my own…

24 comments:

impersonator June 24, 2008 at 9:40 AM  

it also brings us back here...again and again...wonderful aria...keeping it short and stinging...like the verse.

goatman June 24, 2008 at 11:44 AM  

I wish for you etter. Your words seem to reflect a caring soul though.

I am fine. Thanks for visiting my thoughts. We live on the terminal moraine of a glacier which progressed south to this point during the last ice age, then retreated. The Missouri river is at that southern edge and we are above the river on the north side and fear no flooding here. At least 300 meters above the elevation of the river; high and dry.
I worked with a fellow from southern India who invited me on a trip there. . . now I wish I had visited your beautiful country.

The best to you.

goatman June 24, 2008 at 11:45 AM  

Sorry, that should be "better".
I need to proof-read etter!

Alok June 24, 2008 at 8:12 PM  

Apt title for the piece ... liked it for its preciseness ... I think this is the shortest piece I have read from u (except the 55 words ones)


Alok

PS: btw u know, first I read "imitation" as limitation (dont know why) and the lines had meanings too with "limitation"

MAN IN PAINTING June 25, 2008 at 8:28 AM  

Great work.Glaciers are the mothers of all rivers..i think this is the time you should write most..
When i read you i can see a painting so deep and surreal..
Can we paint pain in words..We will try again and again... knowing that what fate awaits us..but as writers we all share the same fate..
'i loved your work'is just a collection of words..it cannot express what i feel..

Casperbaba June 25, 2008 at 12:03 PM  

behold!
for the pain you live, lives you more.its deepened, heightened. remember, its just a clone. your annihilation would help, not you. The desire of the weeping self, to share the loath of the pain. pack it up. tie it tight. fling it far into the existance of the truth of "reality". for it might hurt. yet it wud make you live a peaceful numb life.
pain wuld befriend you! once you slap it on its face. :)

p.s- if u find time visit this photo exibition in alliance francaise. called "faces in the ground coluds" u'll know why i recomended you the place! :)

Casperbaba June 25, 2008 at 1:03 PM  
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Casperbaba June 25, 2008 at 1:19 PM  

my apologies didn't mean to offend you. rest is your choice! all the best!

shooting star June 26, 2008 at 3:59 AM  

pain sometimes is the only thing that helps us get through heartbreak....in pain and tears we forget the heartbreak....

The Wandering Hermit June 26, 2008 at 5:51 AM  

can almost feel the pain flow through the words here...
Maybe the annihilation will come nigh when least expected (I sure hope so)
cheers
z.

unforgiven June 26, 2008 at 8:16 AM  

Funky grammar, but insightful.

aria June 26, 2008 at 11:35 AM  

Impersonator, Alok, Man in Painting, Casper, Shooting Star, Zofo .. Thank you kindly everyone, for your comments, much appreciated and valued.

Goatman .. nice to hear from you.. I'm quite thrilled to know you live on a terminal moraine.. thats awesome.. I've never seen one.. and I do hope you can make a trip to our country someday.. :) thanks much for your words..and never mind 'em typos.. I am worse..

Unforgiven .. welcome aboard .. I don't understand what you mean by 'funky' but thanks anyways.

Thank you again everyone :)

Nash June 26, 2008 at 12:10 PM  

Quintessential Aria poetry. Sorry for being late. Me too wonders what 's funky about grammar. I'm happy with your present frequency. Maintain this pace. Greedy, aren't I? :-)

aria June 26, 2008 at 12:22 PM  

well Nash.. you gonna spoil me.. I'm humbled by your kind appreciations. thanks a ton.

pS :- co-incidence.. even yesterday a fellow-blogger was online with me .. around the same time.. :)

Nash June 26, 2008 at 12:30 PM  

Which is great, isn't it? This is the only place to catch up with you, you don't even provide your email add ;-)

aria June 26, 2008 at 12:38 PM  

look whos talking.. hmmmphhh.. YOU dont provide your blog 'add' .. ok lets have a deal.. you gimme your blog url and I shall give you my email id.. :)

unforgiven June 26, 2008 at 12:40 PM  

Crap.

Note to self; remove blog id from profile.

:P

aria June 26, 2008 at 12:45 PM  

Unforgiven?

Nash June 26, 2008 at 12:47 PM  

Okay Madam. I get your message.

unforgiven June 26, 2008 at 12:48 PM  

Nevermind; there is a very funny joke in there somewhere :)

It's alright, I do this a lot; my sense of humor is, err, rather complicated.

aria June 26, 2008 at 12:48 PM  

LOL I am majorly confused. good nite people.

aria June 26, 2008 at 12:50 PM  

I am already laughing.. pray .. tell me the joke..

Nash June 26, 2008 at 12:55 PM  

If you want forwarded jokes you can mail me :-) Got to go. And remember that story you promised.

Influential Deepu June 29, 2008 at 10:59 AM  

Brilliant !! Pain it is after all that makes us wish for the Life itself.

and btw, thanks for missing me :P

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