kitsch

>> Wednesday, December 5, 2007

i)

Do not exhort me
to get on with
what you call -
my fucking life
I am sick of
just about
everything
except existing.

I wasn’t
seeking
a safe harbor
or allegiance
all I wanted -
was your simple
compliance.


ii)

Playing hopscotch
at death’s door
sniffing back
old miseries -
I go on waiting
for those
caverns of
comatose sleep.

In the very spasm
like misfired
orgasm
it seems to be
coming continually
though indubitably -
never comes.

29 comments:

asuph December 5, 2007 at 9:03 PM  

kitsch???? or anti-kitsch?

i'm sick of just about everything
except existing...


sigh! lovely.

the second stanza in i) started well, but just fell flat, IMO.

the first stanza in ii) seemed like a deja-vu of some earlier poems. the last one is very interesting variation though.

-asuph.

aria December 5, 2007 at 9:21 PM  

*phew* this comment moderation is irritating! and my broadband has fallen flat too like my verses. To comment on blogger I've to use dial-up .. duh ..
I just wrote it in a kind of daze in the morning.. at 5am .. now I think it could have been better as usual .. :( Thank you Asuph .. I'm feeling like a novice . . can hardly think of anything to write . .

Inconsequential December 6, 2007 at 3:52 AM  

I think it's rather good.
Possibly better than something else, in so much as one thing can be better than another thing. It depends on the things and who is observing...

ii) is really rather my cup of tea.

and i) is rather good too.

yes, splendid stuff.
brevity.
just how
a poem
should
be.

Inconsequential December 6, 2007 at 3:53 AM  

oh, PS

thank you again for being my only reader :)

well, nearly...

Alok December 6, 2007 at 6:28 AM  

I am very biased towards you ... I like everything tht u write ...

liked the last verse immensely

Alok

vi December 6, 2007 at 7:12 PM  

First part understood, liked, enjoyed
Second part was a tangent for my limited brain and vocab :)

cheti December 9, 2007 at 9:16 AM  

Part one was very unlikey of what I have read here - for the most part ! It looked straight forward. Or may be I didnt get it at all ! But yet, it was simple sophistication !

The second part was little more like you ! VEry cool !

parikrama December 11, 2007 at 7:30 PM  

I would just like to echo what Vi & Chetz said. So Ditto vi & Ditto Cheti :) Plus add, my own usual flirting lines or two (I leave it to your imagination kyuki abhi mujhe kuch soojh nahi raha hein). Just feeling lazy ;-)

asuph December 11, 2007 at 9:07 PM  

iw, hadd hoti hai yaar! outsourcing "flirting" to the girl in question? i know you're innovative, but kuch to limit mangta hai na?

parikrama December 12, 2007 at 12:34 AM  

Asuph,
Words (written or unwritten) important nahi hein yaar. Words ke peeche ki feelings important hein. Am quite sure Aria would 'feel' the warmth behind my unwritten words without me needing to spell them out for her. Yeh dil se dil ka direct communication hein, eisey koi aur samjhe na samjhe, woh zaroor samajh jaayegi..

Kalyan December 12, 2007 at 1:54 AM  

hmmm...the words are just so strong & vibrant....Wonderfully written!

Ashen Glow December 14, 2007 at 2:11 AM  

Somehow ambled into your blog, dear...

a)Read a few of your posts. Brilliant. Extraordinary.

b)However insignificant this may sound, i cant help it, its a fact- extremely eye catching template.Im Ivy Green with envy.

c)Have posted comments for a few more (puraane) posts, but donno whether you'll ever come across 'em. Hence ended up putting in a word here.
^_^

The Individualist December 14, 2007 at 11:26 AM  

Haha, lovely metaphor in the second stanza.
And it makes absolute sense for somebody to feel sick of everything except existing. Might sound like an oxymoron for some. But surely isn't one.
Back to the despondency again, eh?

aria December 14, 2007 at 6:07 PM  

Inconsequential.. Alok .. Vi .. Kalyan .. Thank you.. :)

Cheti .. Glad to see you .. really glad.. you were missed! Thanks.

IW .. Kuch baatein kehne sunne mein jyaada achchi lagti hain na :( though I do understand .. I’m so damn ‘understanding’. Thanks for your comment.

Asuph .. I think IW needs to learn a good deal from you. helpppp

Ashen .. welcome to my blog and thanks for your kind words. I did read your comment on that story I’d posted some time back. I don’t get many comments .. :D each one of them on every post, old or new, is valued, really. Will drop by your space soon. Glad you liked my template choice.

Individualist .. yeah .. its like a switch .. on & off. Thank you .. glad you enjoyed that metaphor.

PS – Sorry for late reply. I’m going through some tough time, off late.

Alok December 15, 2007 at 9:23 AM  

Aria, tough times are meant not to last ...

Here is a poem from Tagore that has stayed with me for many years. It somehow helps ... I hope it helps ...

The time that my journey takes is long
and the way of it long.

I came out on the chariot of the first
gleam of light, and pursued my voyage
through the wilderness of worlds leaving
my track on many a star and planet.

It is the most distant course that comes
nearest to thyself, and that training is the
most intricate which leads to the utter
simplicity of a tune.

The traveler has to knock at every alien
door to come to his own, and one has to
wander through all the outer worlds to
reach the innermost shrine at the end.

My eyes strayed far and wide before I
shut them and said, "Here art thou!"

The question and the cry, "Oh, where?"
melt into tears of a thousand streams and
deluge the world with the flood of the
assurance, "I am!"

-Gitanjali


Take care

Alok

The Hermit of Wandering Thoughts December 16, 2007 at 4:36 PM  

could sum up my life too for the past month ..., I can almost feel the pain ..

aria December 18, 2007 at 2:48 AM  

Alok .. thank you! Lovely poem and really kind of you to post it for me. Though sometimes I think tough time last the longest.

Zofo .. Thanks for your comment and do take care.

Alok December 22, 2007 at 10:47 PM  

Aria: Wishing u a Merry Christmas ... hope it bring along hopes and desires with it ...

TC

Alok

hotICE December 23, 2007 at 7:26 AM  

hi Aria...

u seem to be pretty disdained with life... he he he.. something on the same lines me too... the corporate world has sucked everything from me....

Btw, I hope you do remember me... :P

The Hermit of Wandering Thoughts December 24, 2007 at 3:44 PM  

merry x mas Aria
take care

Inconsequential December 26, 2007 at 9:41 AM  

Thanks for the visit :)
Usually you visit after writing something, or so it seems...but alas I'm a little saddened as you have nothing new for me to read :(

Hope you are well, and enjoying the seasonal whatevers, cya l8rz

aria December 26, 2007 at 10:11 PM  

Alok .. Zofo .. Thanks.. wishing you all the same.

Hotice .. Hope to see you around for a bit longer. Thanks for 'remembering' me :)

Inconsequential .. It seems I only visit after posting? Really? I thought I rarely post but visit often :D
Yup, see you around... TC

hotICE December 26, 2007 at 10:59 PM  

well, I dunno for how long will keep blogging.. by the look of it and as of now, I am back to my creative lows... hmmm lets see :P

Echo December 26, 2007 at 11:27 PM  

Aria you have changed so much! This is an amazing piece
or should i say peace?

Alok December 31, 2007 at 2:26 AM  

I hope u r partying tonite Aria :)

Happy New yr and I wish loads of fun, love and peace come ur way ...

And I hope u write more often :)


Have fun

Alok

Kalyan December 31, 2007 at 6:12 PM  

Hi Aria, wish u and ur dear ones a wonderful year ahead! May the beauty of this festive season,fill your life with the laughter of loved ones, the warmth of good cheer and all the joy to light up your heart. And hope the dawn of the New Year marks the beginning of a prosperous future!

vi January 1, 2008 at 3:21 PM  

HAPPY NEW YEAR!

Alok January 1, 2008 at 8:31 PM  

Happy New Year ....

(time for a new post .. what say :))


Alok

Casperbaba February 7, 2008 at 2:27 AM  

A dark side of you that u constantly try to reveal meticulously hiding a part of it behind your intimidating vocab. I appreciate your command over the language but it would be more interesting to see some creations drawn with simple lines of simple words. Somehow your writings have got me interested to know what’s happening in your head because from where I stand and observe you yourself don’t have a clue. Its like u wrestle with random thoughts to “slay” them straight.

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